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"I'm your mother."
No, you're not.
"I spit you into this world, and I can take you out."
Yeah, if you wanna be charged with murder.
"I don't care if there's motor oil on it, eat the damn pizza!"
Your DOG wouldn't eat this, bitch.
"Go to bed, Claire!"
Yeah, because slapping me half-way across the room makes me SO tired.

Listen bitch.
It takes more than birth,
To make a mother.
It's like a one night stand,
With a lover.
It's a great paradox,
That you apologize now.
When I finally found a mom,
Who loves me somehow.
Don't say "sorry,"
Because it will change nothing.
Don't say "I love you,"
As if it means something.
Don't say "I care,"
Because I know you never have.
Every time I cried,
You went back and laughed.
You have never been my mother,
And now you never will.
You charged with Karma,
And now you'll pay the bill.
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The stuff up top is real. Most I remember, but some I don't. They're just things that my grandmother told me about.
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I really like the way this was done in two parts, each doing something different, but having it still connect well. I can really feel the anger behind this, and what appears to be resentment. I also feel like this was done in a rather original way, bringing in quotes as well as responses, whether they are to the 'mother' or responses in the persons head. The only thing I can see that might need addressing is shouldn't it say "you're charged with karma"? I don't know if it was intentional or not. Overall I feel like this has a real impact, although I might not be the best judge, I'm a little biased against mothers.
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~lexitaylor670 Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: you don't need people like that in your life. you seem like a lovely girl, and shouldn't have to go through that :)
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=clarissabelle Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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~RoseScarlet Feb 9, 2013  Student Writer
:no: People these days.
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=clarissabelle Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) it's okay.
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~RoseScarlet Feb 9, 2013  Student Writer
No, it's not okay.
What you mean is that we still have to put up with it and remind ourselves that there are people and then there are stupid people. ;)
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:iconscriddles:
I can relate so much it's not even funny.
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=clarissabelle Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It seems like a lot of people can.
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